कम-से-कम हम्हीं से उन्हें कुछ गिला तो है
शुक्र है कि आज, कोई ग़ुल खिला तो है
इस तरफ हवा का रुख़ नहीं तो क्या हुआ
एक ही सही, कोई पत्ता हिला तो है
हमनवा नहीं तो चलो, हमक़दम सही
बेवफ़ा भी संग, दो क़दम चला तो है
लाख सितम कर गए, मगर उन्हीं का दिल
दूसरे सितमग़रों से, कुछ जला तो है
क्या पता था, आपकी चाहत थी बेबसी
राज़ ये नया सा आज ही खुला तो है
आपने की नज़रें-इनायत तो कम-से-कम
बरसो बाद आपका एक ख़त मिला तो है
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* मुब्तला : Afflicted पीड़ित
— संगीता
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Very nice poetry..the spins of words makes the entire content piece a very interesting & enjoyable read. I really like this particular line:
माना कि इस तरफ नहीं था रुख़ हवाओं का,
एक ही सही, कोई पत्ता हिला तो है |
Thank you so much. Your appreciation means a lot. 🙂
Good work. कुछ ख़फ़ा तो है radeef ho gaya hai. Kafiye ko thoda kas le to ye bahut hi umda ho jayega.
Khayal bahut achha hai puri gazal me.
Hi Annirudh,
Thanks for pointing out. This piece was written 27 years back and I myself find it quite immature one. I like your positive criticism and would seek that help from you to correct that ‘Radeef & Qafia’ thing. This piece is a natural overflow of emotions as I’m not even aware of these terms and terminology. Thanks for stopping by. 🙂
Now changed it to ‘कुछ जला तो है’ from ‘कुछ ख़फ़ा तो है . Hope it’s Ok now.
27 years back!!!
Khayal bahut hi khoobsurat hai. Qafiye ka thoda bahut hi pata hai mujhe esliye likha. Ab to aapse hi kuch seekhne ko mil jayega 🙂
Nice work.
Tareef ke liye bahut bahut Shukriya. 🙂
behetreen ghazal
Thank you so much. 🙂
Hey Maitreni .Sangeeta is sure an awesome writer ..beautiful
Thank you so much Kokila. Means a lot when comes from you. 🙂
beautiful 🙂
Thank you so much. 🙂
Reading a good one in Hindi after a long time.
Thank you so much Indrani. It feels great being appreciated by such literary people. 🙂
The flow of the poem is like a pleasant silky breeze in summer. Soulful and meaningful words that touches the right chords. Beautiful beautiful beautiful 🙂
Thank you so much Purba. Your comments are indeed like fresh lease of life and can revamp ones dying spirits. Thanks thanks thanks. 🙂 <3
Bahut khub, Sangeeta Ji. Loved the attitude, emotion & presentation of poem. Appreciate the choice of words & rhythm. Thanks Maitreni for introducing a great poet, who happened to be your mother. How lucky! 🙂
Thank you so much Ravish. Appreciation means a lot when comes from you. It’s a pleasure having your comments. 🙂
Thank you so much for the appreciation Ravish. Indeed, I feel myself so lucky to have her! ^_^
Thank you so much for the appreciation Ravish. Indeed, I feel myself so lucky to have her! ^_^
Thanks Yogesh. Glad that you liked it. It’s a 27 years old poem of mine and I find it quite immature today. I’m evolved a lot since then. If this verse still appeals to you, that’s indeed my pleasure. Thanks much.
I loved the words.
एक से बढ़कर एक सुन्दर लफ्ज़ है।
Thank you. 🙂
This poem was written in 1988 (when I was not even born). I found it today in that old newspaper cutting and posted it without her permission. Hope she’s fine with it now! 😛
सुंदर कविता :))
Thank you Deeshani. 🙂
I would like to know more about Sangeeta…such beautiful composition…hats off 🙂
Hi Shweta, glad you liked the post. To let you know, she is my Mom, also the occasional contributor to TSS blog and part of the team. 🙂 She’s a journo and loves to blog here as well in her free time. You can read more about us here~ https://www.thestylesymphony.com/about-us-2/meet-the-team/
Rest, she would let you know herself. Cheers 🙂
Thank you so much Shweta. You’ll get to know more of me for sure, through my write-ups and poetry, here @ The Style Symphony every now and then. Well I write for some noted news papers & magazines too as a freelancer. Thanks once again.
Good to know you Sangeeta and am happy that I can read your creations here. My best wishes to you and I will keep coming to read more. Thank you so so much for sharing 🙂
That means a lot. Thanks Shweta. 🙂
amazing lines Sangeetaji 🙂
Thank you Archana. Appreciation becomes special when comes from you.:)
Very Beautiful Poem!
Thank you so much. 🙂