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Avalanche: Haiku

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We often pray for a splash of relief when the sun gets harsh. Whenever I saw the soiled trees in my garden, I prayed for rains. I always wished it could rain cats and dogs to see the real green of those dust coated leaves and of course, for a cool escape from the scorching heat.

That day too, I wished for rains and it happened. But before the trees could be washed away for their glory, one of the fruit laden mango trees collapsed to the ground. My heart wept like those raindrops along with that hailstorm. This picture tells the sad story of that dark night which, though brought a refreshing change in the weather yet turned out to be fatal for my favorite mango tree.

broken tree

Haiku                                                                          Haiku

Mizzling was awaited,

but the brunette sky wept with

catastrophic tears


Hindi Haiku                                                              Hindi Haiku

वर्षा की आहट,

पर स्याह आकाश ने बरसाए

विनाश के आँसू |

Sangeeta Mishra

A Haiku is a Japanese poem traditionally comprising of seventeen syllables, in three lines of ‘five’, ‘seven’, and ‘five’, which evokes natural images, now a days referred to as #micropoetry.

  • Rajeev Moothedath

    Love your accompanying comments as much as the beautiful Haiku!

  • Ranjana Shankar

    Very nice…but feel bad about the tree

    • It was really a sad incident. Thanks a lot for the appreciation Ranjana. 🙂

  • Saru

    Must be super stormy that day. Sorry about the tree.

    Your haiku captured the essence or accident so well.

    • Yes Saru! It was a thunderous hailstorm that took a toll on our tree and many more in our city. Thanks that you liked the Haiku. 🙂

  • Wonderful flow of words.So sad to see the tree state.

    Sriram & Krithiga

  • Easwar Arumugam

    Nice composition.

  • Melancholic yet beautiful.. Loves both the versions 😊❤️

    • Thanks Archana. Glad that you liked them Haiku Queen. 🙂 <3

  • Uh- oh.
    So sorry for you and that tree.

  • Purba Chakraborty

    This is so deep. One of the best haikus I read in recent times. Truly amazing!

    • Thank you so much Purba. Glad that you liked it. Means a lot 🙂

  • That’s touching…

  • Purba Chakraborty

    This is so deep. One of the best haikus I read in recent times. Truly amazing!

    • Thank you so much Purba. Glad that you liked it. Truly means a lot . 🙂

  • Both haiku are superb. And I agree with Rakesh that it’s among the best 🙂

    • Thank you so much Ravish. It’s really humbling reading such nice words from you. Means a lot. 🙂

  • heart touching poem…the picture broke my heart too.

    • Glad that you liked the poem Shweta. It’s really saddening to see a tree die, no matter whom it belong to.

  • Chaitali Bhattacharjee

    Nice one…

  • Rakesh Pandey

    One of the best haiku I’ve ever read. Reminded me of a translation of a Japanese haiku, which mentioned trees weeping fecund tears. So beautiful!

    • It’s indeed the most special comment for this one Rakesh ji. I’d never thought that I could write a Haiku ever. But seems I’m learning. Your words mean a lot. 🙂

      • Rakesh Pandey

        You should continue. You seem to have a hidden talent for these tiny beauties.

  • Good one….

  • OMG! So sad! Did the tree survive?

    • No, Mr. Pasha. It didn’t. But we have planted one more at it’s place. Thanks for dropping by.

  • Yes, there are after-effects…
    Sometimes, we wonder if we wished right when we suffer.

    • Truly said Anita. It’s nature’s very own way to show it’s anger.

  • Nice

  • Jyotirmoy Sarkar

    It also hurt me when the mango tree(full of mangoes) of our garden was about to collapse but i could not express it through writing. Nice haiku.

    sometime i feel—Nature is destructive.

    • Thanks Jyotirmoy. Sad, but true. It’s the balance nature maintains when we human breach the those rules made by it (nature). So we, the humans are to be blamed. Good that at least your tree could be saved. 🙂

  • It has the sound of tragedy

  • Good one. Nice flow of words.

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