Subdued Sun: Tanka

tanka subdued sun

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This is my first attempt of writing a Tanka! The inspirations behind are the complexities and adversities of modern life. This picture was clicked by my daughter Anindhya through the car window, during a recent road trip. Despite all her efforts to click a complete view of the sun, what she could get is, the disturbed vision of the evening sun, slashed by electric cables running across the roadside. The irony is, how nature gets hampered with development. But despite all these paradoxes, nature teaches us lessons to face life back with courage after all hardships.

tanka subdued sun

~ Tanka ~                                                                        ~ Tanka ~

Disrupted, doleful dusk

With tattered and scattered sun

Calling crepuscule

To regain its beauty back

For another smiling dawn

Sangeeta Mishra

Tanka is a form of Japanese poetry containing 31 syllables in 5 lines composed of 5-7-5-7-7 syllable count, traditionally evoking human emotions.

  • Wonderful imagery, sangeeta ji!😊😊

  • Rakesh Pandey

    You always were one of the best as far as poetry is concerned, be it Hindi Kavita or Japanese Haiku! Loved this tanka! 👌

    • Thank you so much. Glad this post has managed to grab your attention. Appreciation means a lot when comes from you. 🙂

  • This is a lovely read Sangeeta ji. Am carried away by those lines to meet the dawn. :))

    • Thank you so much Prasanna. Your appreciation means a lot. 🙂

  • Such lovely thoughts in there. 🙂

  • A very beautiful imagery Sangeetha, I like the coinage to indicate the end of a day for the sun just to re-emerge..

    • Thank you so much Vinay. Glad that you liked it. Your appreciation mean a lot. 🙂

  • Jyothi D’mello

    Had to look up Tanka, Syllable (to confirm my understanding) and crepuscule 🙂 Enjoyed both – the read and learning something new.

    • Thank you so much Jyothi. Glad that you liked it. Your appreciation makes me humbled. 🙂

  • First one, and You’ve done great 👍

    • Thank you so much Mr. Singhal. Glad that you liked it. 🙂

  • Amit Agarwal

    A wonderful tanka indeed, Sangeeta!
    And Anindhya’s (imperfect?) click is a real compliment to your tanka! In perfect sync..!

    • Thank you so much Amit. Glad that you liked it. Your words mean a lot. 🙂

  • Amazing Sangeeta ji.Beautifully written.Agree with you ji that Nature teaches us so many things.We have to spend some time with them to understand.:)

    Sriram & Krithiga

    • Thank you so much Shriram and Krithiga. Glad that you liked it. Your appreciation means a lot to me.
      Cheers 🙂

  • Nice poem! Beautifully written..

  • Jyotirmoy Sarkar

    Shabdo ke saath khel geyi aap…baadi khubi se.

  • Lovely post!!

  • Very nice – the poetry and the drive-by capture of the sun too 🙂

  • Indeed wow! Well written.

  • Wow. Crepuscule….I learnt something new!
    This was beautiful!

  • Saru

    Beautiful play of words. Dusk and dawn create magic in the sky.

    A glorious shot by your daughter.

    • Thank you so much Saru. Glad that you liked my Tanka. Your appreciation means a lot to me. 🙂

  • the picture and the words both are really beautiful…. 🙂

  • bushra

    Beautiful! This is the first time I am reading a Tanka and I loved it 😀 The picture is very pretty. The whole TSS family is super talented 😀

    • Thank you so much Bushra. Glad that you liked it. Team TSS is very overwhelmed for your apprecaition. 🙂 <3

  • Beautiful tanka, Sangeeta Ji. Lovely thought. Twilight is indeed soothing 🙂

  • How true… lovely post

  • For a first attempt, this is pretty good.
    Keep writing.